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Neither of my computers are good enough to play most of the newer games on the market. Which is probably a Very Good Thing.

I took another stab at [The City] today. I understand that not every chapter can be full of heart-stopping suspense or beautiful imageries, but I read back what I've written and have that "so what?" feeling. But I'll keep doing it. Today yet another plot twist came to mind, but it really will make things too complicated, and I'll get bricks thrown at me if I write it that way, I think. So for the sake of my mental and physical health, I'm taming that twist down into just a possibility. Some characters may start to think "Could it be [idea of twist]? No, that's not possible... right?", and that's all.

Anyway, I'll keep writing, and then go back and deface, tear apart, and stab it (the process otherwise known as editing) later. It's strange, back when I wrote Weiß Kreuz, I did almost no editing at all. With PoT I'm doing more and more of it, although I don't see my writing becoming any better as a result. =_= The fact remains that [Little Prince], my first PoT fic, is still the one people like the best. I'm not getting anywhere, am I?

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I read this yesterday and thought to myself did I read the Little Prince. As it gave me the perfect excuse to put off studying for my exam later that day I headed over to Word Games to check it out. I also found a whole chaptered story of yours that I wasn't even aware of so I just had to read all four chapters of Happiness too. I really hate studying. And after reading those and thinking of your later fics I decided that you may have difficulties seeing your writing getting better since it was never down to the level where it makes someone cringe.

Even in the Little Prince you were able to capture their personalities and tell a story that seemed to fit who they were. It's a sweet tale without any of the darker themes or twists in your later stories so it's easy to see why people still adore it.

But your style has evolved, even in Happiness with the way you give a preview of what is to come in the chapter at the beginning is interesting and letting us know something is happening. The way you capture the emtotions of Fuji seem just a bit more real than they did in the Little Prince (although it is always easier to capture grief) and perhaps there is just a bit more attention paid to the smaller details that bring out the story.

And then there is Trials of Trust, which is probably one of the first things I read of yours (And was horrible and probably didn't comment because I was feeling lazy or something) And the Emotions that go through Tezuka as he slowly loses control of himself are nearly tangible, and although the story is slow to build there are pieces laid down in each chapter until you reach the end and you wonder how you didn't see it coming. You are torn between feeling sorry for hating Tezuka and wanting to hug him for all the pain he has been through. It takes talented writing to be able to write like that.

And you only seemed to have gotten better at toying with reader's emotions in the D1 Strange Relationship story (btw, didn't you mention something about a prequel or sequel?) The way the same part of the story was told by both Niou and Yagyuu was also clever and really showed just how two people can misunderstand each other. Weaving in Yukimura's story into the D1 Plotline without having it feel like it was disrupting the flow at all, but only adding to it gave extra depth to the story. The characterisation of your characters always seem to get better with each story.

And that would probably bring me to The City. But you already know I adore this story and all the different strands of stories that are slowly coming together to create a larger story. I look forward to seeing where it leads (and who dies... I still want D1 to live) and what else we will learn about the characters in each new chapter.

So as I was hoping to get across from my rambling is that you were never a horrible writer. Instead your style just grows and matures and the way you tell us about characters and what they feel and how they interact is becoming more subtle and just as powerful.

And editing is a good thing. At least that's what all my profs keep telling me.

Sorry for rambling and if I don't make sense.